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Re: Speaking of "I made this."
Posted: August 06, 2008 • 11:37 pm
by Frank
Whooo, more! At first I was interested, now I'm intrigued. You do realise we'll keep asking for more now, don't you?
Re: Speaking of "I made this."
Posted: August 07, 2008 • 12:02 am
by Fred Buer
Mucho goodness. In a bad kind of way. And that's hard to do.
Kudos!
-Fred
Re: Speaking of "I made this."
Posted: August 07, 2008 • 12:20 am
by Bafitis
Good Stuff...
Re: Speaking of "I made this."
Posted: August 07, 2008 • 3:36 am
by Steve
I am easily drawn into the plot. Nice work! I am looking forward to the next part.
When I read the police-by-the-door scene:
It was Velia. But her hair was different, much shorter, and red instead of blonde. Angie remembered her eyes as blue, but they were green in the picture. Easy enough to change, she thought. But why?
I got the feeling that the right thing to do was to ask if she was murdered too, as if to distance myself (I was Angie at that moment) from Velia. And when the policeman narrowed his eyes, I really felt I had made a mistake
Re: Speaking of "I made this."
Posted: August 07, 2008 • 5:29 pm
by michel pronk
Sorry Jen for ansering this late.
U know me always slow aint i.
in any case yeah realy promesing and dark fealing to the story we wouls love to hear more .
Well i want to at least i wont go cubs way and start mentionions apartments but what got me was.
Who is she
Why is she there
Why steal from them and make identifiing them hard when it was selfdefence
and more of those things even thought is a short things i cant help but go ohh i want more.
ohhh darnit it took me so long to read and post by the time i hit the post butten jen made a second part doh. blond blind me